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i was displeased with the way i represented duo during his separation 
from heero.  he just wasn't really faced with the sorts of situations 
that might allow him to carry on in the manner in which i first 
envisioned it.  however, i was very pleased with how they managed to 
tear trant apart from the inside out. =)

i was displeased with hilde's addition to the story.  she sort of served 
a purpose, but not really enough of one, in my opinion, to warrant her 
inclusion in the tale.  on the other hand, i was more satisfied with 
meiran's involvement than i thought i would be.  and dorothy served her 
purpose as more of a cameo appearance than really a mover and shaker of 
the world, but that's what she normally does, so i'll let that pass.  
one could hardly expect her to dirty her hands in an actual battle.  i 
wish something more could have been done with quatre and trowa, but this 
wasn't their story, so oh well.

i liked the state of wufei and meiran's relationship, but i wasn't 
always too happy with the way it was expressed.  they both say so very 
little of what they mean.  of course, with heero and duo's relationship, 
we had a bit of fun, and it was quite a job sometimes to remember that 
this wasn't their story, either.  it was technically wufei's story, but 
honestly, i don't know if he really got developed and delved into 
sufficiently to truly say that without doubt.  duo's difficulties were 
supposed to be an interesting sub-plot, not something to carry me 
through the places where the plot wore thin.

i'm not particularly fond of the way the action unfolded.  'action', 
such as it was.  it came in spurts, with long stretches of mere talking 
while walking, or thinking while lying still, or more talking while 
sitting around.  but i suppose that's a disadvantage of trying to write 
something that stayed away from a few of the major clichés.  once you 
decide to ditch all the rampant sparkly mysterious mumbo-jumbo, all 
you're left with is just plain mundanity.  for all their 
supernaturalness, they've all always been rather down to earth.  ah, and 
of course, no random and multiple sex scenes to fill the time, either.  
i hate it when i get to the end of these things.  they always seem so 
inconclusive because i haven't ended with some glorious orgy and 
gratuitous declarations of love.  ...for some reason, i'm sort of 
reminded of the end of escaflowne.  for being orgy-less, that is.

lessons i learned: next time i write something like this, i might just 
go back to my Really Damn Long One-Shot format.  it seems to work better 
for me.  well, for those vignette-oriented things i tend to write, 
anyway.  i need a little work when it comes to this whole plot thing.

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